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CS2D General Results Of No Giving Up:*Fragmovie*
Results Of No Giving Up:*Fragmovie*
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_bjbHv3Xub4
I liked the pace and the music of the first clip (until 2:00), but other clips seemed more like simple gameplay to me.
You should have tried to compact the text a little and add more of the first clip to make it 1:30-2:30 total in running length
Continuing your story theme you could have continue telling it in short sentences between clips - just an idea, but you just added more clips after the first one with little editing.
In conclusion: I was very impressed with the beginning and felt like you ran out of motivation to keep working on a better mid/ending. I liked it though!
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