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user Jawohl has written
it was a joke... cute animes are wrecked if they are turned into hentai

And fucked up if there's cosplay p***

Whatever, i give you feedback.
Try using more shadows. The eyes are OK, facial expressions needs to be better, i don't get teh storyline and... it's short lol

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Well, I'm not sure if it would be appropriate, I was just pointing out what can make a regular manga slightly perverted and moe, while not completely turning into hentai.

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You need more depth in the story, I agree with pretty much everyone, shadows, and try a bit of shading. If ya'd like some help on anything, just ask.


yes, i do need help, where do i put the shadows on her
please showme a shadow example by editing this picture

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Uhm, instead of editing, I found a somewhat simple picture, and it pretty much shows where shading and shadows can / should be put.

Chibi Chen

Basically, you don't use one shade, but instead, you use at least three or so, a light one (the shine), a normal one, and a darker one (the shadow).

That's pretty much it I guess, I hopefully helped a bit,
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Meh, I just read through some of it, you should really add some crude shading and perhaps get someone to correct your grammar and spelling mistakes. It's the little things that make something enjoyable, kinda like the baseball bat in GTA.

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2 tails: She's not a catgirl, in fact, she's a Nekomata.

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A cat may become a bakeneko in a number of ways: it may reach a certain age, be kept for a certain number of years, grow to a certain size, or be allowed to keep a long tail. In the last case, the tail forks in two and the bakeneko is then called a nekomata

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anyone ever watch/read ninja nonsence, if so i need someone to help make a game baced on it... as a fan i thought it'd be good to make, as i havnt seen any other games baced on it... so i need some one to make sprites for shinobu (walking,crouching, jumping and fighting with katana) and il do every thing else... if any one will help i will be greatly thankful
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